UNAWARE

by midnight♥lullibys   Sep 25, 2005


So lost in this tunnel of sorrow,
Searching for hope of tomorrow,

How long must I feel concealed?
And can my scars ever be healed?

They constantly remind of all my past.
When I felt like such an outcast

Digging me into depths of this hole
My self-inflicted grave where I console

Greif and loss of which I have plenty,
In this where mist sences are airy.

Cannot see my hand held out,
Praying for everything I'm without..

Love, protection, family to care,
Though, of whats to come, I'm unaware

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  • 18 years ago

    by Dave

    Very nice thanks for inviting me to read it just blown away thanks 5 for you
    Dave

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Okay i couldnt really grasp the idea of this poem i read through this several times and i understood up until the last two stanzas but that dosnt matter because as long as you know what it means its okay soooo other then that great poem you were off once on your rhyming "Greif and loss of which I have plenty,
    In this mist sences are airy."
    unless im off on my pronoucing but i dont think those two rhyme

    They constantly remind of all my past.
    When I felt like such an outcast

    i dont know exactly why but this stanza didnt seem to flow at all i think its cause the second line has not enough syllables i dont know good job though

    4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Wonderful job

  • 18 years ago

    by Alicia Biter

    This poem is very well written, but i think there could hav been more to it

  • 18 years ago

    by M MEM

    This is good, everything you write is so deep

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