Second, and minute...

by kareeenuhhh   Sep 26, 2005


Every second and every minute
every minute and every hour
every hour and every day
every day and every month
every month and every year
my heart is beating
and my lungs are breathing
and my love is growing.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    Great poem but i would like to make a suggestion that you certainly don't have to do. but i think that if you want to improve your writing you may take into consideration.

    in this poem you repeat words a lot, i really like the concept of the poem but i think that the poem could be stronger if you didn't repeat the words so often. it sticks out to the reader after a while.

    so this is just so maybe you can improve your writing or use it to improve your future writings. the poem is good i liked it.

    ~Jacklyn

  • 18 years ago

    by bOlly danCer

    Wow.....its a short but awsum poem.....cute........adorable.........and amazing....nice work.
    5/5
    luv
    nami
    xoxoxo

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