Omg this is so sad i love the last 2 stanza's...but htere is one thing i dont understand...in the second to last stanza you have a number 3...is that supposed to be there? and if it is....wtf does it mean lol 5/5
Wow. great job with the construction of the voice in which the feeling conveys. this is a beautiful piece of writing. i can relate to the feelings and emotions. a great writer is one who can relate to their audience with just a simple voice of mind. keep up the great work and keep writing. 5 for you!
I liked it, i think you did a good job, but what the first person said.. is that 3 suppose to be in there, if it is, it doesn't make sense, but the rest of it was really good and had a nice flow and didn't need to rhyme for it to be good, you did a good job, 5/5