Broken Blue Eyes

by Truest Lies   Oct 18, 2005


Broken blue eyes,
Shed no tears.
Broken blue eyes,
Have no more fears.
Take your courage,
And your invisible strength,
And brave all against the world.

Broken blue eyes,
Cry no longer,
Take your broken heart,
And your broken eyes,
Take a box,
And fill it with all of her goodbyes...

Clench your spirit
In a new fist,
Take it all,
Into a new hold.
Broken blue eyes,
Take your tear-stained dreams,
And throw them in the sea.
Because, my blue eyed boy, this wasnt meant to be.

*This is the first poem that I actually wrote on paper before submitting, so please give me your thoughts on it, so that I can decide whether to keep on writing on paper, or just to type my poetry.-Thanks!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lyn

    Thank you for your comment to me.As you asked, I am not 52 I'm 58. I wrote that poem for all the youngies on the site who are feeling weak and despairing at being treated badly by someone they are emotionally attached to. Nobody should be allowed to control or manipulate or intimidate or destroy another human being just because that person loves them. You are a very good writer I could not believe you are 12.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lyn

    A good poem.I like the positive exhortation to Blue Eyes to be strong and courageous.I love 'clench your spirit in a new fist' a good play on words.

  • 18 years ago

    by Christopher Liau

    I have to agree with kayla, the flow isnt there because i was expecting the rhyming scheme to continue through the whole poem.
    Also i dont really understand "Take it all, Into a new hold" it just doesnt sound right to me.
    It does need a little work but its a solid first effort.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Amazing talent

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I love it, has beautiful lines, and a nice message, keep writing.

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