A very unique flow and very expressive

Its very good and flows very well, only these lines:

"The sun starts to rise
i start to feel free
i feel the early breeze
singing to me"

seem to inturupt the general flow of it somewhat. maybe another look would be useful...however, this is not needed since the poem is very good as it is.

Awww hun, i'm at skool, and i nearly started crying!! it's so sweet!! it has very deep emotion and feeling in it!! omg i sound like such an emo lol!!
luv ya loadz hun xxxxxxxxxxxx
luv RaNdOmGaL xxx

Lol to random gal. this is a gr8 poem hun i love it xox

Hunny bunny wot a gd poem!!! gd work keep it up
love ya loooooadz!!
hayley
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Heya babe
dis is amazin
rememba dat i is always here 4 you weneva you wana talk
luv ya 4eva babe
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Very nice! Just one think I thought I should point out:

"and the *dessert* (desert) sun"
-just a simple spelling mistake =) happens to everyone.

Overall, very nice poem! The flow was great and I liked how the stanzas were short but got to the point! Great job!
5/5

Everybody has secrets and feelings they hide,some are just far more extreme then others.Sometimes letting out the truth isn't as bad as we think it will be. excellent poem 5/5

Wow.
This needs no improvment.
I expected it to be good..All throughout.
But, the more I read, the more I liked.
Another poem that was good, good, good, AMAZING.