Comments : Help her..

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephy

    Omg thats so sad, stay strong(if its about you that is)good job-xxx-

  • 18 years ago

    by Fade_t0_bLaCk

    Really good poem. I like it a lot. Keep up the good work and I hope to see more.

    Sydni

  • 18 years ago

    by Polly

    Wow this is so amazing. im speechless its such a great poem. it flows brilliantly, and the emotion seems to be in every word. i feel like that so much. its so sad, and youve totally showed that in the poem. i love this bit:
    She hides behind her long hair
    always living in the dark
    later she will take the razor blade
    and tomorrow she will cover up the mark
    keep it up your poems are lush!
    polly xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Omg that was the most emotional poem ive ever read, i luvd ur rhymes. i all around luvd this poem frum beginnin 2 end, n this i can completely relate 2. i cant think even slightly of giving this less then a 5/5! keep up the gr8 work!

    ~*Who Cares?*~

  • 18 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    I don't know who is the person in this poem...izzit u or izzit ur sis...well..I certainly hope both of u r fine...this poem is good neway...5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Leonard

    Thats good, i like it. It's a pity that scars have to be bared to show people how you feel. The time is now, take it and scars will be spared

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I like the way you end poems, the final line or stanza is powerful and gives a good finale. Again, this is about cutting, and cliche, as you probably know. So that's all I'm saying on that area. You give the subjects in the poem a voice with feelings and emotions, which then are passed on to the reader; this is important and good for a poem to have, so well done. Only real suggestion I have is try some punctuation in the poem, even if it's just apostrophes. Keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by pale angel

    I love it i could almost relate to how she feels. keep it up. i love it

    love heather

  • 18 years ago

    by Grotesque Angel

    God that is a good poem, I wish I was that good. Keep it up
    But anywho, You might like to read some of my work, it would be greatly appraciated.

    Darkest Wishes
    Matt

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Wow that was really emotional... you are a great writer... it seems so real when you read it.... keep it up...
    sammie

  • 18 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Oh baby, sweet sweet angel, it hurts me so bad to read this, to hear how much your suffer, I wish I could do something, to wipe away some of your pain, to help you live again. I know no one ever did for me, and I wouldn't want you do feel that way, so d*** alone.

    -Mikochan

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This poem touched my heart, its very emotional. Its a really deep feeling poem. Love your poetry
    keep it up
    tara xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Very good! Great job on this one. . .*

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Once again, good work on putting a new spin on that type of poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Love it as usual 5/5!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Juls

    I love it..full of sadness and emotions. The 4th and 5th stanzas lost the rhyme(sp?) but than it was regained back in the end. Great work and im glad i read it.
    Juls