A Vampires Love

by RadianceInReverse   Nov 17, 2005


He watches me through the glass
looking at me as I pass
for me he has great passion
wishing I was his
impossible as it might be
he still wants me in his life
but I cannot see me being a vampires wife

His touch so tender
His kiss so sweet
his pale skin,
his hair as black as night
my love for him is so deep
That I'm not even scared
of his deadly bite
as his lips touch my neck
I know he's only leaning in for a loving peck

A vampires wife I cannot be
but his sweet love, I will kindly receive
If only this love were true
and not only a dream

Thanks everyone for all the help...Love Yas..Joclyn

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  • 18 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    I really liked this poem So far well i've always loved vampire poems/books (im weird i know)so any ways i dont think you need help! your doing a great job!! ^_^

  • 18 years ago

    by Beth Robertson

    Hey read "Desire After Dark" that will help you out alot!

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    You started off with a love for a vampire and how he has made you fall deeply in love with him. However perfect he might be, you're not prepared to be his soulmate forever. I think this is very well done. You kind of round it up at the end, there is a beginning and an end. A mysterious and sad tale. I think better would be trying to cut off the straggy lines and improve on the structure? I think the content is pretty good already, just that the structure seems off to me. =) Just a thought, hope you don't mind. Nonetheless, I like this a lot. Thanks for sharing.

  • 18 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    I think it's good enough...that's what I think...cool poem...

  • 18 years ago

    by Matthew A.

    This is a good poem. To me, this poem doesnt need to be fixed but the title should be changed. This title should have something to do with vampires and love. Hope you fix it.

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