Comments : Love and War

  • 18 years ago

    by Shelby Bridges

    You are dealing with a difficult subject
    to write about but you seem to have
    mastered it with your ending...I love the way it flowed through and the way
    it started at the beginning to the end.
    Excellent.........I'll be back....5/5
    Check out the one I wrote
    You will always be my last

    Thanks for Sharing
    Shelby

  • 18 years ago

    by Matthew A.

    This poem is very powerful in words and passion. I like the words you use and hope to read more of yours.

  • 18 years ago

    by JAY Poet

    I loved it it was so great thanks for the comment!!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem reflects well the joy and sorrow pleasure and pain of lovers it flowed wonderfully and really made me, think. laugh and cry another masterpiece

  • 18 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    You have made such a poignant choice of words, the joy, the rapture, pain and sufffering which lovers face in a relationship are captured so well in this write. Well done.

    Warmest regards,

    Steve

  • 18 years ago

    by Grotesque Angel

    This is a great poem, it shows that love isnt all just huggs and kisses. It hurts more than anything in the world.
    Thankyou for the experience of reading it.

    Darkest Wishes
    Matt

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Hey Hayley, this was an excellent poem. i real work of art.
    it had a lot of really great imagery and wonderful use of the english language. keep it up. you really are fantastic.

    -Suzie

  • 18 years ago

    by Lily

    It was beautiful and i think that you described break up and what happens when your in a relationship, i felt like that with my ex but even though we broke up i remember what we did and what i felt knowing deep down that if i never find a love like that i'll be happy because i experienced it once and i think that's all that matters. Thanks for the comment keep reading and commenting.

  • 18 years ago

    by HJ

    Adel you are too funny!! Thank you so much you are very sweet.

    Im glad you liked it...Thanks to everyone for your kind words and encouragment means alot to me.

    Kisses
    Hayley

  • 18 years ago

    by Brad Champagne

    Breaking up is never easy if you really care for the person, but harder than that is never hooking up with the person you love. Anyway, well done. My only comment is to try and establish a strong rhythm for the piece. Keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jay27

    Very clever and evocative Hayley.

    Good to see your poem getting the rating it deserves too.

    J

  • 18 years ago

    by Kurt

    Great poem and great job. Love your writing. It's a style that very much inspired me and helps me find either a basis or platform for me to start from.

  • 18 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    HJ,
    What can I say.....You portrayed the joy and the sorrow which we have all been through at one time or another. great job.....

    Love Ann

  • 18 years ago

    by Peter DeJesse

    Sometimes the pain never goes away. we just get used to it. Great poem about a very heartbreaking subject.

  • This poem..its jus wow...soemtiems i dont understand how people can write so well....but this is exactly what my friend has jus gone thro...thanx for gettin these kinda emotions out for poeple:) it really helps them

  • 18 years ago

    by Harry Bryant

    Hi Hayley,
    nice poem, great is the sorrow of breaking up and great is the joy of making up. the anguish to extreme joy is a story everyone of us have lived with at one time or another in our lives, some of us more than a few times, keep up the great writing and make us all happy, as always your friend harry

  • 18 years ago

    by Cheyanne

    Wow thiz poemz wonderful no wordz can express how gud thiz iz!!! u have tru talent keep up tha gud work ur doin gr8!!!!5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by dora

    Hey darl. this was a really g0od p0em. very well writen - g0od use 0f w0rds, t0uching lines with meaning. great j0b! well d0ne! keep it up!
    l0tz 0f l0ve / d0ra

  • 18 years ago

    by `*~1-lUv~*`

    This is great u have so much talent. Keep it up. WONDERFUL WONDERFUL!
    -HUGSN KISSES!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lithium

    I loved ur rhyming its really good xox rc