Wow... this was amazing... your a great writer and this poem is true to the heart i can tell... keep it up

sammie

I liked this line,
'you're stabbing it softly as i speak'
it's an orginal choice of words, they kinda contrast with each other. I think you could use this metaphor more and it would be even more effective. I think the last line is really powerful, even though its basic idea is repeated alot, in this poem the line is simple and straight to the point with no fluff around it, making it even more effective.

Broke my hear poem very well written 5/5

This does come across to me as a teenage love/depression poem, and a typical one too. I hate to be harsh but there was nothing all that original in this, it all seemed familiar and of overused subject. I guess your rhyming was good and the flow was smooth too, apart from in stanza three where it totally went, so this could do with some work. A sad and quite painful poem, but unfortunately nothing that I've not heard 100 times before. Keep writing.

Great poem

Thanks ..

I take it this poem is for the same girl.
Just keep your head up. And don't do anything "stupid".
I had to learn that the hard way.
Things WILL get better.
Even if you don't want to believe it.
5/5

Wow, this poem is beautiful. It is very deep, and well worded. You expressed yourself very well.

I really liked this poem this is actually one that i chose to be the 1st place one great work keep it up, ttyl PeAcE

~Rico Smooth~

A VERY SAD DEEP AND TOUCHING POEM..HOPE IT AINT AT ALL TRUE THOUGH I LOVED IT!:)
xxx
:)

It is true though. sadly.

Wow....truly amazing!!!!

"Sadly you didn't break my heart.
You stole it in my sleep.
You still have it to this day.
You're stabbing it softly as I speak"

i love that stanza!!! i'm def adding you to my favorites. keep up the excellent work!
-xXx-

I think I may have commented on this already but oh well!! Lol. It's a really great poem, I love it. 5.

Tiffany.xox.

Well, it's not your best but you really lay your emotions on the line here. And for that I'll give you a five.

Don't let it get you down, I know how impossible that sounds but she wasn't as perfect as you thought if she could do that to you, right? There's one thing about life that's generally true, the good balances out the bad. So if all of this bad is happening to you, just think of all the awesome things that will happen in the future.

Well, it's not your best but you really lay your emotions on the line here. And for that I'll give you a five.

Don't let it get you down, I know how impossible that sounds but she wasn't as perfect as you thought if she could do that to you, right? There's one thing about life that's generally true, the good balances out the bad. So if all of this bad is happening to you, just think of all the awesome things that will happen in the future.

..Sorry about posting twice there...Finger's just itching to click...:)

Its reallie touching... my boyfriend did something like that to me before... twice... but soemtimes people think hurting can help them get over someone? whether they realize it or not.. i did something like that to him too to try to get him to let go, i didnt like the other guy but i just rather him let go so he doesnt have to hurt so much...
in the end we both failed and got back together, 7 months anni in 3 days~
great poem :)

Excellent poem, truely breath taking, Love stroies seem to be able to relate to alot of people. You definitely grabbed my attention and held in until the very end.
I can relate and I understand where you are coming from its alot like where I am at this very moment in between a hard place and a rock

Hey
g8 peom
ur soo true love does equal pain and the sad thing about it sometimes there is just no way to avoid it. love can make or break sumone. i have learnt that. i just try not to make myself to vulnerable. but i have sorta lost all hope in a good relationship coz all mine have been fake, abusive or extreamly painful. u don't wanna turn out like me. but yeh check out my peom "her lil wish" its bout wanting to be loved. well if ya have time. anyway keep up the good work and stay in there you'll find sumone special soon:)
luv edwina
xoxo

Wow..Alot of meaning there. Very powerful..Good Job*