I really like what you have going so far! A great message and a fantastic choice of words. Keep going with the flow and you will have an excellent poem!

I really like it so far. It has a good flow and a great message.

This one was really good! Nice work!

Well i really liked this the way it is. I know it's not finished but it just ends so right and it's true. Who knows what's the in dark. Who cares what there is. I mean it's a unsolved issue that no one will ever know. How many things will be in the dark i mean so many questions on answered for me that's all good to know because i don't want all my questions to be answered. But to me i think you did an amazing job even if you finish this or leave it the way it is because i like original stuff meaning i like it the way it is and not adding or editing it. keep it up. keep on writing. Your very talented. love always and forever.

I think that for the length of the poem, it is amazing.
It's rather short, but beautifully done!
The message is clear, and honestly well written. I think you might even want to keep it the way it is.
For we can't help you continue, because you have your own style, and I kinda like it the way it is.
and the title, defenatly should stick with it. It just fits.

Short, nice and descriptive. Keep it up

I like it as it is.It's very powerful and emotional....Your a very good poet..keep up the good work

Hey, honestly I think that this poem should be left as it is. Even if it is short and sweet, it just seems like something that stands great on its own. Maybe put it in the quotes section though?... I think that if you were to try and extend this it would only seem to repeat its meaning with more words and probably take away from it. (But perhaps maybe I only think this because I don't have any ideas for it myself... I wonder if you could blow me away with some more of your work ;)) Anyway, Great job! 5/5.

Well... good starting, the way u wrote it is very strong! i like the way u write very rare!

The flow in this poem worked well as a majority and the message was clear.

The line:
'of things we cannot comprehend'
seems to have too many syllables and throws the flow of track for a minute, but this is recovered by the next line.

Keep writing
Nici

Wow this one's really really good. It is true and full of emotions dispite it's negative nature. Your poem had beautiful flow from beginning to end. Nice you hun!

-Mikochan

Jeez thats awesome keep it up

Woah. this is amazing. It is so true, you put it into words, like a true poet. good job man. good job.

Wow, this is awesome, the rhyming and flow is really acurate, and it just flows along really nicely. Well done.

This was a aussume poem!

You wrote a coment to me so its only fair a repay you in the same manner.
mint poem, great sum up man keep it up. im hoping to post my poem about life up on the site soon so keep an eye out coz ild luv to no what you think of it
peace.

Absolutly amazing! loved it! great work!