Comments : The Demon Inside Of Me

  • 18 years ago

    by Allison

    Wow, that was such a good poem. I really liked it. *5/5* Keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by TinyDancer46

    Oh my gosh... hun... wow.. this is the saddest poem I've ever read. You are beautiful the way you are, never let "Ana" tell you otherwise. I hope that you can find help, because you are such a talented and amazing writer and I hate seeing you go through such pain. If you ever need to talk, I am always here. Keep up the amazing writing, I hope you're okay... =(

  • 18 years ago

    by Amanda

    Aw hun, luv ya loads and loads xx I hope you are ok cos that poem made me cry. I don't want anything bad to happen to you just like you said it to me before when i was going through a bad patch. I'm always always here for you. Remember that! ok? I need you because you're my friend and you support me. The reason I stayed was because of you. You made me stronger now i hope i can do the same for you. please email me :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Megadrive

    Very well written! If this is what u meant lol I like how instead of just saying Anorexia... U like gave it just a simple name Ana, so... in a way the reader guesses... what you’re suffering from… So it really keeps their attention! I mean it is obvious what’s going on… but they still wonder what Ana is (Or maybe I’m just a bit stupid… no idea!) but it was very good! My only advice would be to use commas and periods, give your poem rhythm, and the reader will always be able to tell when a sentence stops. Also it just makes the poem look nicer lol=)

  • 18 years ago

    by I.Dont.Own.Emotion.I.RENT.

    Omg this poem is sooo good. you wrote it perfectly. it's amazing. i'm sorry your going thru all this and i wish i could help you. i send hugs tho! *Hugs*. lol i hoped that helped a tiny bit. it was very creative using "ana" for anerexia. i'm always here for you if you need anything. just PM me and i can give you the best advice i can. luv ya hun. keep up the AMAZING work. lyl~lex

  • 18 years ago

    by lonelynow

    This is just how i feel, i am not so far along yet, but getting there. thankyou
    x

  • 18 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    Hey Sabrina. Another amazing poem by you. This one I can relate to on every level. I know how you feel... skin and bones but you still feel fat. I'm the exact same. I've always had eating disorders, but now it's really taking over. I know how hard it is... just keep your head up. You know I'm always here for you. 5/5

    ~ Tina

  • 18 years ago

    by Jason Kramer

    This is one of the best poems ive read yet. nice ryme scheme is rockin and i like the topic... keep up the GREAT work

    _JAY_

  • 18 years ago

    by Kylead

    Hey awsome poem for a while i was cuaght up over bit** i even went to a hospital for it and trust killing yurself only makes things worse specaily me my shoe lace snapped anyhow youll get over it weather u like it or not so just go out have fun some some one else and tell that bit** she can su** yur balls and to fu** off

  • 18 years ago

    by Kylead

    It was a great poem i liked it alot
    anyhow i gave 4/5 umm maybe if yur not to busy sometime u could check out mine

  • 18 years ago

    by .ღ.Jasmyn.ღ.

    Wow...this poem is amazing
    you are a wonderful writer
    dont stop writing,, I can really relate to this poem...
    I hope you realli dont have to cope with this problem and that it's just a poem,, but if so stay strong...

    much love,

  • 18 years ago

    by LOOPE

    WOW, I loved your poem. This write is defenetly 5/5. I love how you gave Anorexia a name. Stay strong, and keep up those great poems.

  • 18 years ago

    by Macabre

    My gosh......I..I dont know what to say..
    Your words echo with extreme talent,
    i must give you that,
    they have a light that shines....
    through the dark of my mind......

    Stay strong Angel, don't kill yourself- but kill that demon.
    I've had troubles in the past with suicide.. don't go down that road..

  • 18 years ago

    by Hoover

    Great Poem! Keep up the good work

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    That was amazing nice work.
    Emma 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Timeless Hopeful

    What a emotitive poem, makes you want to read again and again.

    Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by MorbidCupcake

    That was beautifully written.
    Nice wording, and i luv how you call anorexia-Ana. It makes me think of it as a person, which is an interesting way to put it. Cuz it is like a demon person inside.