Love Hurts

by Biscuit   Jan 23, 2006


It wasn't you that held the knife,
but it was you that caused the pain.
You made it bleed.
You left the scars.

You bought me roses,
like a dozen sharpened blades.
Dripping.
Red.

The hurt I felt inside,
spilled out in blood.
It was a thrill to see it
leaving me.

(age 15)

*good riddance to my ex, this ones for you

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  • 17 years ago

    by FlirtingWithDeath

    Oh wow I love how you turned the rosses into a weapon very wicked. 5/5 =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    It's not your best poem, but it has plenty of emotion, which is cathartic.

    I'll leave this one be because although I see things to change, it's a poem that needs to be left alone.

    Bret

  • 18 years ago

    by amelia

    Short & sharp...
    love hurts...
    keep it up
    love
    amy

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Short, sad, excellent

    I loved it, it had a meaning, well done

    xxxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Syn

    First stanza: it can use alot of work.. maybe do a gew more colorful words?
    Second stanza: simply.. perhaps if you intensified your structure of your stanza?
    Third stanza: Basically this poem could take a lot of improve ment. Not to sound harsh but this poem looks quickly made and .. perhaps rished.. and also perhaps you could put a rhyming scheme to it?

    ~David