Good job! Love the context of the poem itself. If I may suggest, breaking the poem up into stanzes and the overall presentation will enhance the flow of your poem. That's my own opinion of course. Great write though... 5/5
A bit simple maybe, but you had a bloody brillant concept! There are way too many poems about killing and suicide, so it is always refreshing to read one that doesn't end that way. Life hands us a lot of pain, but we can pull through and that was the message I was able to get from your poem. Nice write!