by MaSkEdSoUl Mar 18, 2006
category :
Life, society /
about society
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I'm lying there on the bed, |
by Imani
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YOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
by tyanna
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I agree that the flow wasn't just right but it was still a great poem!!! 4/5 |
by Natalie
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I actually like it, It's different. Great job on this one! Keep it up hun x-x |
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I so loved it! |
by Kaylee
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Good intentions but I think you could have gone far with this: Maybe describe the homeless as you see them, or how you feel about people seeling themselves. The words are great alone but maybe you could add something to make it seem deeper. 4/5 |