This is a really good poem, i can feel the emotion in it, it brought a tear to my eye, please comment on some of mine, it will be greatly appreciated, and if u ever need to talk im here
love cass xoxo

Awesome job......ur emotions can be felt thru these words......gr8 job dear as usual!!!5/5

luv,
Bharti

Fantastic poem great job keep writing and take care hun sarah x

Very painful. I read it and felt the pain all the way. Your love poems fill my heart with love and your dark poems make me cry. I hope these dark days of your life wont stay for long. Incredible poem as usual, loved it.

With Love
Michelle

Hey..
Hmm.. well this was an interesting read, good job.
Monique

Hey..
Hmm.. well this was an interesting read, good job.
Monique

Ok.. now i seriously think, this was THE BEST poem... of all time...
I mean, everything fit in so well.. the lines, the words.. they were all perfect.. so many feelings... so emotional.. yaar, this poem should win an award.. no jokes...
definitely a 5

Much Love,
Ipsita

Excellent poem! absolutely breathtaking. I like the abstract approach, it suits your writing very well.
I noticed maybe two grammar mistakes that if fixed, would deliver a perfect outstanding, meaningful poem..
*second line i think =there; their
one more but i have fogotten!
much love
xoxo

Gloomy and painful. Don't you hate it when a cloud covers your sun? I hope it doesn't last. Incredibly wondeful write!

Damn thats got alot of pain....u really expressed it well....5/5....very amazing write....keep it up......hope things get beta for you soon.

sonam
ps:thnx for ur comments.

This is brilliant, great job! it creates a good picture in my head. its so sad. 5/5

xoxo XHeavilyBrokenX

Your as excellent as ever. this is so great.

take care

Wonderfully written, very different from your recent stuff - this one shows remarkable maturity of thought flow.

hope you are feeling okay

take care
prayers and peace
shobhana

Sad but great, I love the way it flows perfectly, def another 5 vote take care sarah x

Yaar, I don't know what to say. I am speechless. Deep and very intense feelings in this piece you have penned.

my wrath unfolded and disappeared long time back
its all me and my sanity now flowing with time
rotted within myself while hanging on life's track
dreaming to gain my long...long gone pride

I think you have so much to be proud of. You are a great man. One I am proud to know :)
Love Cindy