Upon Reflection

Wonderful poem hun, I thought it was very original =] Keep up the good work 5/5

Memories of pain,
of sorrow and regret;
memories I would rather forget.

I would change this to

Memories of pain,
Sorrows and regret.
Some of which I would rather forget.

Removes word repetition and also remids us that things we regret we should remember and learn from.

Not over-elaborate or too prosey. A good message of self awareness without saying too much.

Nice effort.

Bret

"a frown only every once a while."

- I don't think that sounds quite right... maybe "once IN a while" ??

This poem is very original and different. The only part I don't get is who you see when you look through the window... because you don't say it's a reflection of you... Anyway, you did well. 4/5. Keep up the good work!

~BJ~

Wonderful words and abeautiful vivid image. Your title was catching and felt like it really did belong in this section. It also felt deep for two words.

I think your strongest stanza was this one:
Its a face full of wisdom,
a face with a smile;
a frown only every once a while.
A full life, brimming with happiness;
rewarding experiences and success.

Even though the while threw me off.

I think our weakest one though was this one:
Waking from a slumber,
I look through a glass,
with a yawn and a sniff
I gaze at a familiar face.

It just didn't feel right with the others. It's really good just not as powerful.

Creative, imaginative too. well done
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