Very sad - well written, though the flow broke a little here and there, and the rhymes wern't great . . . Nice meaning. I'm sorry for your friend xXx

Peace. [Sole]

Very good peice, though the flow is not consistant in the places that is wavers it is always quick to recover. very sorry about your friend

5/5

Wow, so sad..

I can really feel the pain and the feelings you have put in this poem. It's so emotional.

Sorry for you loss *hugs*

Lotsaaaaaaa love
-xxx-

Great work rhimes were a bit off but it sounded fantastic.

I'm so sorry about your friend

Aww, I'm very sorry you had to feel this pain. This was a very good poem! I do know what it's like to lose someone close, And it hurts alot. And you expressed your feelings very clearly in this poem, Much better then what I could do. So 5/5 I loved it!

luv natalie x-x

A very sad piece of writing. your friend would appriciate this loads. I felt the flow was thrown off a little here and there. but the end result very good. kat

Sad, its stupid that those things happen :( my friend wanted to kill her self but she didnt thanks to me :) the flow was brilliant except it hit one bump at the end :) apart from that amazing poem once again :) 5/5

~StefQ

That was really sad yet really touching! You expressed your pain in such a beautiful way! You had a bit of a rocky start and the first lines didn't seem to fit but once you got going it turned out perfect

Aw hunnnn thats so sad. I'm sorry about your friend.. writing is definatly a good way to express what you are feeling, and you are very good at it.

Awwwwww so sad.. im so sorry it had great flow and a great rhyme though 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I love your poem, it's so sad. I love the title, which describes suicide perfectly. Your poem tells everything that ran through your mind when you find out and after, and how you're feeling now.
I hope you're feeling better.

Great job! 5/5
Keep writing.

Aww this was sad and truly well written. I definately felt your pain in this one, it was really good. Keep it up. xxx

I'm sorry for the loss of your friend, it must have been hard for you, and her family and friends. At least you can let your emotions out through poetry.
It was an emotive write, however, for me the rhymes were a tad predictable and the flow was off in places.
Nevertheless, good job.

I'm so sorry about her. It was so sad you could definately tell the emotion of it! 5/5

I really liked this wonderful sweetums
5 out of 5
sorry about your friend
i dont knwo what its like to loose someone close but id imagine it would hurt alot;
stay strong, if you need someone to talk to im here for you.
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