Wow. This has to be one of my favorites yet. I loved your rhyme scheme, especially the first line in every sequence, because it gave a new criteria to poems. Its very different, and I love how the end ends. Keep writing... and if your old works is as good as this one, keep posting them! :)

I like it too,...has a different, but good flow to it.
Tim

Hey babe! It is so nice to hear from you again! I hope things are going well for you and all. Thank you for the sweet comment on my poem. I good poem, though it lacks your usual beautiful discription, most likely because it is an older poem. As always, you wrote with powerful emotions that are very easy to relate to and you write exactly how it is, with no sugar coating, a quality I admire in your writing. Hugs hunni!

-Tainted Mikochan

Oh wow that was really gr8
I really missed your poems hun!! good that you're back!!!!!
keep it up
Luv Yaaaa
NemO xxxxxx

HEY BABE!! omg im so sorry i didnt call u bak the other night but i lost ur number nd yea!!! can u plz call me i fukin miss u so much nd i was like nearly intears lol that i couldnt call u!! u mean the world 2 me nd i wish so badly that u were with me right now!!

i luv yu!!

Woah hun that was soooo good hope u ok hun xoxo nice work

Wipe me Off the Slate,
Off your memory.''

What a cool way of ending your poem. You've got immense wordy knowledge. {as i, as you can see, don't} :)

xxx

Hey i have been there and i love your poem. i would be greatful if you would read some of my poems and give me some pointers. thank you and i loved the poem.