This is a really good poem..very descriptive. My favorite lines were Every spoken word so clear
Every moment holds a tear
i really loved that. & the ending was also great. 5/5*

I like the flow of the poem, and parity

The rhyme was fantastic in this. It was so entertaining yet consise. The contradictions everything. Superb!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I like the last two lines. But I'm a wee bit confused on what it was about. I liked it though!

Very lovely. i especially like the last two lines... ties everything together in a very short yet powerful way.
-A

Interesting poem.. the only criticim that I have is its supposed to by lay lies, but I know that you did that for the rhyme scheme..

preaty intersting.. I liked it

thanx a lot for your comments they mean a lot to me

I really like this. the thyme is brilliant becasue none of it is forced, or appears to be at any rate. I especially love the last stanza.

Jemma

I actually really like this. ^-^

I really loved this poem my favorite part was 'Every single day we struggle
For each step we take, we stumble'
It flowed so well. I thought it was very good! 5/5