Wow, i really loved this poem!! It was very well described (it put an image in my head!) the flow was nice!! Keep it up!! 5/5

It described a lot and how it had the tist between the two paragraphs. I don't know much to say about it except how it started as you're thinking one thing then bam it's something entirely and you're there trying to figure out the gaps.

Imagery nicely done but sometimes the flow was off every now and then. Perhaps it was the words or lack of. But then again it's not really the flow that makes this interesting it's the content and strength of the images.
~Fallen

That was deep, and quite dark, was well written. well done

That was deep, and quite dark, was well written. well done

Great poem! For some reason I felt there was much more complexity in the meaning then what was there. Beautiful masterpiece I must point out, I loved this one so much. Keep it up! 5/5

Wow.. very dark but very good! i loved it, it is so deep and complicated! keep it up! 5/5

This is a very thought provoking well written contemperary free verse dark poem.
Seems so familiar makes me wonder who inspired it

Woah, that was awesomeness to the max!
verry cool! written so gorgeously...
i just know i spelled that wrong. curses to spelling.

Wow, I always get caught up in these kinds of poems. I can't stop seeing the blood on the wall. I keep getting these images of a completely dishevelled room, lacking the love it needs to look like a real bedroom.
I really like how there is no resolution to the poem, but the last few lines complete it so perfectly.

Wow this is really good!

Wow.. i love this. It's so suspenseful and really dark, well duh, it is in the dark section. But I just love the whole story line thing, it was very intruiging, and kept my attention. You described everything very well
You wake up naked and cold
To find you're on your own
What a nightmare, it must have been
The taste of cyanide stirred into your wine
As your very last cigarette burns
I love those lines. Great job on this! 5/5

"Your coffee has got cold
Listen to your answer machine"
[has "gotten" cold. "Answering" machine]

"You're looking a wreck"
[That just didn't make sense. Looking like a wreck?]

This was a really good poem. A few suggestion I had, but other than that it was amazing. The imagery you had in here, wow, that is brilliant. I loved it to bits! You really created a dark backdrop for this poem, from the beginning where you described the setting. I played out everything in my mind, and that would be a horrible awakening for anyone! Amazing stuff, keep on writing!..

I love the first stanza. The second one is quite confusing to me. I expected an explanation of what happened in the first stanza and that didn't happen. It's very good and extremely well-written, though.

! dude, that's pretty intense

You left nothing, nothing to doubt. You had me going when you started to talk dirty, I was wonder where you were heading, but the
end justifies the means. All I had to say was
excellent.