Omg Darien I loved it!!!! Speechless, lol it brought such a smile to my face. The rhymes were perfect! Unforced and natural, just a wonderful write!
(Thought I'd let you know you have the strange symbols by your apostrophes in the last two stanzas ^_^)

Way to go sexy! lmao

WOW damn Darien....lol so amazing...hot and passionate!!!!!!!!!!!!!

These childish games we played as a teen,
has now left us with a huge mess to clean.

^^ Thats so cute! haha...OMG I LOVED THE LAST STANZA!!! Darien you did a great job with this one....we seriously need to write a collab like this LOL....you made me sweat boy lmao ok anywho......I didn't know how to write an erotic piece for this challenge but you did good with it!! I really enjoyed it, it actually made me laugh!!!
Chels

Darien, this is awesome! Very well written, light hearted and romantic..

"She took off her bra, I took of my shirt,
together we made the perfect dessert."
^^^ this line is so cute, like it much! Nicely done, great use of imagery... ;o)

Superb! I like the naughtiness in this :) Wonderfully Darien.

Lol great job Darien!! It kinda made me hungry lol. All of your work is good...i envy you lol :P talk to ya later!!

Haha great job i love it

Lol.. This was awesome! Really discriptive too. Makes it betterr =P Taha. Really loved it, Thought it was different to all the poems I usually read. Keep it up. 5/5

`taleee xx

Okay, i didn't read the entire thing, because im at school, and didn't realize it was explicit until after, but from what i was able to read, it seemed like it was very well put together, and whether or not it was well-thought through it was still amazing! great job!

**meggie**

Hahaha

This is so cute!!! lol Especially that last stanza! I honestly loved this, it brightened up my day. =) I love your poems, so keep writing

Dude lol! very fun poem to read one of the best naughty poems i found on this site

I loved this poem, it's so original. Amazing!!!

Keep writing. 5/5

Wow, I like it. Very good write. I liked this line, "together we made the perfect dessert." That was some funny stuff there...over all it was a 5/5 in my book. Good Job and keep it up.

Peace, Joe

Wow... speachless... woah that was awesome.

Darien very entertaining poem. LMAO

This was the best ever so awesome
i love it sosososo much
makes me wanna play too

Ha that was pretty cool the flow was great and it made the poem go smooth keep up the good work 5.5

Wow, that's hot and steamy for ya. I wish I could enjoy such a game....

This is a great poem. I am really speechless and i love it. lol you deserve a 5/5 keep up the good work.
xoxoxoxo
jess

Haha. I agree with Jess Darien. I thought it was wonderful, it wasn't to overly graphicly like alot tend to be. I really enjoyed reading it. :)