Do what you say

I thought that the first four lines were both too variant in their syllable count and too nondescriptive in comparison to the rest of the poem. In general, I think I'd expand this poem with details, examples of how you know this and what he did to show that, etc.

Shorter poems need to be emotional or descriptive if you want your readers to be able to relate or leave an impact on them. Again instead of out right telling us person did this or didn't do this or I want show us using things we can relate to wether it's nature or an emotion on how you would be or are feeling in this situation.