That's great, babe.. well done, however, I hope you don't mind if I point out some punctuation needs.. No offence intended, so I hope you don't mind, but I think you should consider some stops and commas, as on the last line, it would read better if you put Some food, spare change, help, if you can.. 5/5, though, as it's really heartfelt. Well done again. xx

This is reli nice and sympathetic to homeless people.. amazing flow and rhythm.. i like how u presented this topic in a different light.. it was just a little confusing coz of the lack of punctuation.. for example, i dunno wat u meant on the last line.. plz do add in the commas as needed..other than that, the poem was great..

keep it up
take care
NannO

I totally agree! My only thing is that what if what you give them will be used the wrong way! I have given money to those men along the road and there have been times that I will see them with a porn magazine the next day. It just saddens me.

Anywho I thought it was great, I think you could have went on a little longer give a few more details cause there is a lot to a homeless man.

Good poem! great job!Keep it up! u have a talent! thanx for commenting on my poem! 5/5

Wow is really reflects the type of people you see around London etc.
I really like the verse lines

dreaming of a day he'd have a place to call home
and maybe a pet so he wasnt alone

It was really touching.
Most peopel see homeless people as objects, but this puts an emotion and feeling into those people that you don't see.
Nicely done.

Very emotional, and like Kim said, touching! beautirul in it's own very special way! GREAT! 5/5

Awww.. that is such a good message displayed wonderfully.. i really loved it!
very very nice write!

some food spare change help if you can
^ you should add commas after "food" and "change"

really enjoyed this write! 5/5

Swallowing his pride he sits and begs in the rain
no one can even see or hear his pain
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I loved those lines. Very nicely written. It was a great poem aswell. Abit sad, But really good. Keep up the great work! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Nice tender poem. One thing though, the grammer in the first line sounds different from the rest of the poem.

^-^keep it up

Very good work!!i wrote about a homeless man once,it didnt go so well.so i give you credit.its not exactly an easy task.keep up the great work!!--lexie

I really like this one. I liked the topic you wrote about. It was so sad though. Now I want to go out and give a homeless person some money. Great Job! I loved it!

Amazing poem----flows nicely and is easy to read-very touching---beautiful poem 5/5

Omg thats sad! i dont think i will evr be able to look at the homeless the way i used to. your poem is soooo touching and so sad

Hard topic to write, but you pulled it off with flying colors. I'm not too sure about the flow as you seemed to have concentrated too much on the rhyme scheme. In my opinon it might sound better in free style, but then most of mine are so maybe I'm basis. Great write anyways. 5/5

Good rhyming, and interesting topic -- it isn't one you hear very often. I try to give homeless people food instead of money, since some homeless people earnestly use money for things they need, while others squander it on some of the wants that got them there in the first place.

I love this poem, great message to it. keep up the good work, ur a great poet.

O m g, this iis really great... i loved it...

5/5

kazza