California (A Monchielle)

Interesting write. Love it. The image you painted was great and the flow and rhyme was good. Loved the last stanza, it stresses that California has so much more to explore. Good write. 5/5

Lol I'm not a californian, but utah's kinda nice. newayz it's nice to hear about how states are and it makes me more interested in visiting, the rhymes were good too so that was pretty awesome! i give that a 5, nicely done

Wow, loved the last stanza! really excellent.. the flow in this was great and the rhymes worked well.. the descriptions were beautiful and i just got a nice warm feeling from reading this.. once again, wonderful work! i shall be checking back for more! 5/5

I've never been to California but this paints a pretty good image in my mind. This was another excellent captivating write! Keep writing.

Pip xxx

That was a very sweet poem abour ur home state.. nice to see some people still patriotic and who love their land like this.. loved the rhyme and the flow; both were reli good... but what stood out the most for me was ur last stanza.. it brought your whole poem together, especially the last two lines.. made me feel all warm inside.. hehe:D

keep up the talent
take care
NannO