To me, this is amazing.
probably one of the best poems I've ever read of yours.
you are very good with words.
but I'm sorry things aren't at it's best right now

I loved this style more. I like how you used original words in your rhyming scheme. It is a very sad poem but yet offers hope that your support will always be there.

OK, here is your critique.... I think you are sending out a very powerful message with this write. The rhyme and flow are wonderful. I have just a couple of things in mind to make it flow a little easier: in stanza 2 the use of the word "you" is used a lot, the same with stanza's 3 & 4 & 5. So possibly change stanza 2, line 3 to "There is" instead of "You have" and line 4 "Now lieing" instead of "You lie now". Stanza 3 line 3, "Saying" instead of "You say". Stanza 4, line 1, try "knowing" instead of "you know" and line 3, "Blaming" instead of "You Blame". Stanza 5, line 4, "Having" instead of "That you have". And in stanza's 7 and 8, Line 4, remove the "And's". Other than that I think it reads beautifully and I love the words you chose to write this with. Very descriptive. You are very talented, keep up the good work.

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

I loved this poem, I wish someone had slapped me around like this, and then I might have not have the past I do today. You care about these people in your poem, but you tell them staight what you want them to know. You write about how they becoming their own worst enemy but the lies they tell to validate their behaviors. Your poem is both loving and honest. I can feel your internal conflict, wanting to help your friends, but also upset about their actions and decisions. It is so hard to want to help someone who won't be helped. It is not your fault, just remember that. You are going above and beyond by caring about them, but remember that they are the only ones who can make the big changes the need to do in their lives. Just love them, and love them, because that is all you can do. Hugs.

-Tainted

More words and a deeper meaning, hmph, well you did a heck of a job. It's really boring reading the same old suicidal poetry. This one was very different, and I liked the style and the approach you took. The flow and rhythm was great, was were creative and the message was clear. Awesome stuff.

Angela made a few good points. She is uber cool :)

Ah...Beautifully written. I actually loved the different style, it brought out a really strong and vivid sense of imagery to mind as I was reading. Excellent work with the truest words in influential lines. Keep up your perfect work always and remember how much I love you. You're the best! =D xxx 5/5

This almost made me cry... I hope she reads it and knows how much you care. Truly inspiring.

♥

Car

Amazing sierra just amazing.*tears* i know what your going through....literally and im so so so sorry babe...things will be ok again no matter what happens and remember its their choice not yours no one is as fault!

Brilliant!

I.n.c.r.e.d.i.b.l.e

Love the new style. Creative.

I love you

And i really hope that she knows how much u care about her.

Very good, I loved it, 5/5 keep up the good work!

Hey sierra!!!!! i totally just got a new account. this is it. my email was screwy so i had to switch accounts!!! so could you do me a favor and comment some of my poems? thank you sierra i love you fore ever and ever and ever!!!

Excellent work, I haven't read much from you in a while and am now regretting it! :)
I absolutely loved every line of it. The way you expressed what you said shot an image straight into my head.
Keep it up. Hope to see more new stuff from you.

Sincerly,
GA

I think this is great. I felt like this a few days ago. Love it! 5/5

Wow. this rrly touched my soul. great job at this <333
plzz read some of my poems and comment them??