The man of my dreams . . .

by Bloomed Rose   Jun 21, 2006


All some guys care about
Is a girls appearance
And how they do there hair
And all some girls care about
Is popularity
But I don't even care

I want something
Special,
A different kind of guy
one that really
cares for me
One that wouldn't lie

No matter If
I've applied my makeup
or even what I wear
He would always
be so kind
and hang out with out a care

He'd hold my hand
All the time
Around his best friend
And he would call me
all the time
Our talking would never end

And on Valentines Day
He would give me a rose
The best present he could give
And If I every had
A horrible day
He'd make it better to live

Then there would be
one final thing
that this dream boy would do
He'd unlock my heart
and end the day
With a simple "I love You".........

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  • 17 years ago

    by Krissey

    Man do you know how many girls want to find a guy like this..now a days doesn't seem like theres enough to go around..I like your style of writing this..I really enjoyed! :-)
    -Krissey

    P.S Could you read "Come kids dont play?

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Compton

    Hey! Good job. Proofread, you have a couple mistakes. kk? read mine, sis. Later

  • 17 years ago

    by Mustafa

    I Think that it was truly coming from
    somewehre inside you
    and you should put more feelings in it

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Aww.. that was cute.. i think if you added in a little more emotion and some better descriptions it could be even better though! it was a great idea, but you made it feel a little bland.. sorry for being so blunt.. just a bit tired..so maybe just add a few more descriptive words and some more emotion and it will be great!

    and hang out with out a care
    ^ "without" is one word.. and i dont think you should use "hang out" there as it sounds like you are repeating the word "out"

    He'd hold my hand
    All the time
    Around his best friend
    And he would call me
    all the time
    Our talking would never end
    ^ here, i also think that you should not use "all the time" twice, it ruins the effect..

    And If I every had
    ^ it should be "ever" not "every"

    good poem though.. ill give it a 4/5.. nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by johnnys_princess

    Great poem, what a man hey, loved the formation,style and choice of words well done

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