I thought it was good. The rhyming was good. The flow was good. The topic was good. lol Everything was good. I loved it!

I really liked the rhyme scheme in this one, it was very different. However, there were lines that didn't really flow.

"But what of her results
Developing her doubts"

^^ I guess it's because it didn't make much sense to me. Still, a really good poem.

#1 intro
#2 environmental concerns
#3 poverty
#4 greed
#5 hatred/lack of lovin'
#6 cutting/depression

maybe?
Interesting poem.

This was so well witen in an unusual style but it worked so well, flowed perfectly well done much luv lynne

Very different...but the words have such meaning...this is such a wonderful poem

If you get trapped in thinking about it, it is hard to stand the world we live in because of all the crap the goes on all the time. I have felt that way quite a bit, and have ranted about it. When I was little and people asked me what I wanted to do when I grow up, I said I wanted to change the world, to make it a better place, and I still do. *now if only I could find a way to make the world listen* I can understand you sentiments for writing this poem, they make a lot of sense and are shared by many, including myself.

-Tainted

I think I agree with Sean Allen probably. that was a beautiful poem! hey, by the way, you and sam were officially the last two on that topic. lol I said it was locked, done for, but you two and briana are exeptions! lol GREAT JOB ONCE AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!
- "Bloomed Rose"

This is a very true poem. I love it when people write about the world's problems, because no one ever does! The whole way through, an element of sasdness held on strong. This poem gave a good sense of the world's need to change. I think what made it even more sad was that no one actually tries to stop it in this particular piece...good job!