Really really beautiful. i loved it completely. (even the title was amazing. lol)

She's wanting to reach out for some support,
Because she feels this is her last resort.
Her cold fragile hands won't stop shaking,
And her beating heart just keeps on breaking.

Oh man that stanza really draws the reader into the poem and makes them feel the pain and gives them chills! I love this write Taleee I am finding I'm liking most all of your poems and I'm running out of things to say! Wonderful job as per usual!!

I like it, my big issue with it is the abrupt ending that isn't in the same format as the rest of the poem. But that's just me.

I am in love with this poem i can see why it won first!!!!!

Loved it. very nice, no way I see to improve what you wrote.

Simple, sweetly sad. I love it.

Brilliant!!!! loved it... check some of mine and comment please.. neyney

Congratulation on winning the contest and you well deserve it. I love the way you express the sadness in the poem. I think you don't need to improve this poem is great!

Amazing, just like your other work I could picture it all in my head. You use great imagery for the reader to understand. Wonderful job

Juls

Your stuff is fresh, it new and real and its great. your a talented writter keep it up!!!!

I felt where your coming from. good job 5/5

I think your poem is excellent and i had tears in my eyes reading it. well done and best wishes xx kim xx

Sad......but it is a nice poem....keep it up...

I kinda didn't like the ending but it's kay. Liked how it flowed well and had some nice word play. Enjoyed the imagery and really just thought it had been well written.
~Faith-less

Great surprise at the end. I loved the way the first and last stanzas were similar. I also liked your rhyme scheme, great work. I loved it.

--Steph

Um... so good!
lol
This is awesome.
But you already know that, I'm sure!
Well, keep writing...
Cause you're very talented!

Love,
Tina
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Absolutly love the first stanza! great job once again! keep up the writting!

I can see why you got first place! that was a very good poem and definitely could feel the emotions... great job

I felt the ideas in the poem have been very over-done by other poets in the past. You did a good job with the language but the idea seemed very plain so i didn't like it as much. Well written anyhow and good use of repition.

Yup i added u to my favs like i thought i would