Sub-conscious

by Wings Of Flames   Jul 20, 2006


Into my sub-conscious mind,
I find a place of drain,
Where all the living are the dead,
And blood falls from the rain,

Carcasses crawling deep inside,
But are soon to break the seams,
A darkened gateway it is said,
Where reality becomes your dreams,

Hope is lost and love can't breathe,
Through the stench of rotten past,
The 'water' is a darkness,
For my yesterdays to last,

Blood is creeping through my veins,
It smells so bitter sweet,
Venom enhances every thought,
For it's me I shall defeat,

Forever lost in this peril,
Where the lines are cut too deep,
No one shall see into my soul,
Where the creeper only reaps,

Into my sub-conscious mind,
I shall see no light of day,
Into the depths of foreboding,
Where my soul is left to stay.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Another really good piece. Fantastic in fact! My favorite stanza was the first one, though I'm not sure why I'm afraid, maybe it's the flow. There were a few lines I love, like 'For my yesterdays to last', 'For it's me I shall defeat' and 'I shall see no light of day'. I think I'm a big fan of the word 'shall' in general, because it feels poetic to me.

    Brad

  • 17 years ago

    by Antithesis

    Great poem..brings out all the feelings and makes it seem sureal.good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Holy moly, you have such talent! =0 I simply can not believe that this poem is less than a 5.0 and only has 126 visits. It's unreal. I loved it. 5/5 =]

    -Jenna.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sorefromreality

    Amazing..flawless flow and rhythm...terrific plot and words were absolutely great...theres no way to pick this apart and criticize it...phenomenal...thx for ur comment
    love ya lots,
    sore

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow...Not much I can really say here...It flowed really well, emotional, deep...Everything a good poem has lol. 5/5 =) xoox

    Samantha

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