Ode to Amanda

"Your radiance caught my gaze,
The first time I encountered your eyes,
Your beauty never ceased to amaze,
Like the splendour of spring-time skies."

-I really like this first stanza. Especially the last line since I associate Spring with beauty and I can just imagine. Pretty stanza.

"Wearing that stunning dress,
All attention on you,
I merged into the darkness,
Unable to pursue."

-I really like the last two lines of this stanza. Either she is the light and you are darkness, or that you've become just one of her many admirers. I dunno. I like the use of the word "merged", great imagery.

"So don't break my aching heart,
Or steal my fragile soul,
They were yours right from the start,
Only now they are perfectly whole."

-What a cute ending. A perfect ending. As for the the other stanzas in between, the rhythm was a bit off, but no biggie.

Omgsh this is so good ! i'd love it if u checked out some of my poems.... 5/5

Nazeer

Aww..that's sweet hun,I love it

Love you ^_^

Beautiful poem! It flowed really well and great use of vocab. I really liked the lines:

"Wearing that stunning dress,
All attention on you,
I merged into the darkness,
Unable to pursue."

Wonderful! Keep up the awesome work! 5/5

--Angie xoxo