Your rhymes didn't feel forced and the flow was stable. I think maybe you coukd have gne a bit more deeper with the emotions abou wha it feels like to be neglected or anger. Your descriptions were alright though. 4.7/5

Very good job on this. The flow and rhyming was really good, and it is filled with so much emotions. I like the way that you ended it. You can tell that you love your mom/dad in this, but hurt that you don't think that they care about you. But you did a great job on this. 5/5 Keep it up!

Awwww this is so sad. It flows wonderfully well and the emotion is so clear. It has a desperate sadness that comes across well in a simplistic style
Ver good. 5/5

Samantha --
This poem really wasn`t too bad, but I had to give it a 4/5 for the following reasons.
1) The flow. The flow of this poem kept fluctuating throughout the poem, and it kind of distracts the reader from the actual words. I would highly consider revising this -- some of your lines run too short, and some of them too long. Read over this poem a couple of times, and you`ll see what I mean.

But the rhyming and the wording of this poem was really good! You used some really good rhymes, which was definitely a plus. So overall, good job. Looking forward to reading some more of your work in the near future.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

I enjoyed reading the poem. It was great. Filled with great emotions and it was really hearfelt. It really was and I think you are talented. Keep up the great work :)

I can relate to this poem alot. My dad was an arse. Anyways I really know where you're coming from good job with the emotions, Five of five.

Yet again, your rhyming is cliche... You use easy rhymes; try finding different ones. It'll improve your poetry TONS. I used to do the same thing..

Now, I loved this one... Because I can relate to it so much. Im not sure what else so say, but I loved it.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Hi I gave u 4/5 because it didn't flow very well in some spots. I think I would also rearrange some of the stanzas. It has great content. Please don't be offended, just a bit of free advise, take it or leave it. Smiloe Loretta

Nice rhyme scheme and flow. The emotion and story were well-executed in this poem. Great job.
5/5

As always~ Kate

WOw. Such a sad poem, and sadly I can relate. Tehe. I'm guessing this poem was more about a father and daughter relationship? ..Anyways, I hope it isn't true. I don't have a good relationship with my mum. But back to the poem, I liked it alot actually, I didn't think the rhymes were forced or anything. Great job! 5/5

Natalie``

"Just to look for something that was just down the hall." I felt that this is line is too long and isn't explained well enough -- it seems to exist just to complete the rhyme.
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I thought the poem was pretty good, though the rhyme scheme was a bit overbearing.

I think it is good, but there are a few things you could work on. One or two of the rhymes seem a little forced, and the line "I slit my wrists at night" just seems so un-imaginative (if that's a word lol). Other than that the flow is good and I understand the meaning of the poem. Take care and I hope you don't mind constructive criticism!
- Polly

This is a fantastic poem....Well done. I know this is hard to believe, but no matter how your parents treat you...they love you in some way.

A very revealing release of emotion and a well written dark poem

Aww im so sorry
this is such a beautiful poem.
im so sorryy though. let me know if i can help you in any way

Awww.. hunny, this was so sad.. it flowed well and all the rhymes worked.. the emotion was loud and clear.. keep up the great work! 5/5

Although you did not really explain who the rest of the people were, anyone reading it could surely tell:)...Good poem.
i really liked the 6th stanza:
"Your daughter, I am supposed to be.
Supposed to feel with happiness and glee.
Instead, you make me feel like a slave.
I really am trying to be brave."
to me it was the strongest stanza in the poem:):)
Good Job!!
xoxoxo

OH MY GOSH i feel the same way! only i dont have any friends left!! : [

Im really sorry if this poem reflects your life, but it kinda does mine too... im the oldest of seven, and i feel the same way........ Youre a good writer, keep it up, and know that you have friends even if we dont know each other and we live far away from each other, if you ever need to talk, leave me a comment!!!!!!

*Jay*

Ohhh. Realyl sad. I can relate though.. I feel like this about my Father.. Anyway. I liked this poem aswell as the others I have read. Very nicely written.