Final Wind

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 29, 2006


And she doesn't want to talk about it,
She doesn't want to cry,
She doesn't want to think about it,
She doesn't want to lie.
These feelings surpress her,
Until she's got no more,
These feelings are too much for her,
She's melting to the core.

Perhaps this time,
She's gone too far,
She's not just fine,
She's not a shining star.
She's the girl that lies,
To all her firends,
She's the girl that cried,
Around the final wind.

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  • 17 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    You can really feel the emotion in this poem...it is very well written.

  • 17 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    These feelings surpress her,
    Until she's got no more,
    I have often felt the same..

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*im_the_best_at_ruining _my_life*~

    Ok...that was interesting i liked it....like i said ur very good.....

  • 17 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    WOW---This is such a short poem, but holds so much emotion and the way you worded everything makes the poem so powerful--- Great write! I love it--

    5/5 Keep it up-Your dark poems are my favorite =-)

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    XDarkSuicidex --
    I think that overall, you did an alright job here. The flow and the rhyming seemed kind of forced ;; and it was somewhat unsteady. I would suggest revising this, but re-reading it first. Try evaluating your work yourself ;; I do it all the time! It really helps boost the ratings in the poem, because you can read EXACTLY what someone else is reading. Nice job, though. 4/5

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

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