Oh, so nice. I liked it, how you defined things with simple words, bringing to mind different scenes.
Two friends together, a child dying in a bed, a woman betraying her husband...
I thought of all these things.
This was sensational. I got into the poem,its very descriptive. It was a great read. Enjoyed it very much.5/5 Thabnks for reading some of my poems, I always read and comment when someone does it for me. Thanks Loretta
Well, when i comment on a poem, i usually like to pick a stanza that I really liked and post that in my comment, but i cant do that for this poem, because i really loved everyone of these stanzas, the way you mastered this poem was amasing, you are very talented, great work.
Ooo! I liked this poem a LOT! Lol. It's so short and simple, but it means a lot to some people. It really does. I loved the flow. It was so easy and didn't have very many words to have to fumble around with. Terrific write! =) 5/5 xoxo
This was really good! I LOVED the last stanza ;; I feel that it was the best of them all. This poem definitely held a lot of emotion, and, the flow was perfect. The rhyming, spelling, and grammar was perfect as well. Wonderful job!! 5/5
Hmm,this one got me thinking. I like the simplicity and the words were real but for me the terms 'lust', 'love' etc mean more to me. It was good but if you could make some of the vocabulary and terms a little less cliched etc it would be better (sorry for being fussy and nitpickity but that's just who i am, like to be honest)
Good poem..i liked how you described each thing and what it was made up off...it was deffinatly different:)...Awesome poem..My favourite stanza was the last one
"A happy time,
You'll never forget,
That I am Life."..it was for sure the perfect way to end this poem:):)5/5