Wonderfully written piece that I can tell you've put a lot of emotion into..I'm so sorry to hear about this break up and I have no advice to give..its hard I know, but if the love you both had was true...you both would forgive and forget...and if not I guess you know the answer is you weren't meant to be together..but keep your chin up and if the love you have is so strong for this person...than I know you'll do all you can to keep the relationship together...nice write
-krissey

Good ending theres admittedly things you need to workon flow structure excetera but no ones perfect and this definately meant something to you.

I know my poems need work and all that but for this im a givin' you a 5/5
cause it was from the heart.
~Emah
;(

Awwwwwwww.......and wow awsome poem!!! keep on writing!!

A nice poem but too sad, and hopefully it will make the person come back to ur life, cause it is really great
you have done a great job.

Awwww.. this was so sadd.. i loved the metaphors and imagery you used in this, they added so much effect.. the title is really catchy and draws the reader in.. the flow is pretty good and the rhymes work.. excellent work! keep your chin up hunny! 5/5

Awww...this is sooo sad...the ending was so beautiful and the flow was quite good and the rhymes are okay...the emotion you put into this poem was excellent!I loved it! 5/5

Hey Bridgette, Wasup?.. I Think Your A Great Writer, And I Really Loved The Way You Put Your Words Together. The Pauses You Used Also Made The Poem More Vivid.. And Exaggerated Certain Parts That You Wanted To Stand Out.. And I Would Have To Say That You Did That Perfectly. 5/5 With No Doubts
-Darrin

Damn... great poem... im going through this pain right now... so hard... be strong and keep writing!

~angel~

It's terrible when someone breaks your heart. I know, I've had it happen to me before. It's ok though, we get through it and we come out stronger. A really nice poem, easy to tell you put a lot of thought and emotion into it.

That poems reminds me exactly of a break up I had! Really well written, the description of emotions felt is really good!
xx

So sorry for your breakup, it looks like you really felt for him. Life sucks sometimes eh?...and love just makes it even harder..but we still want it, because of all the other times, when it makes you feel like flying, like it's the closest thing to magic....*sigh*...i hope you find something even more magical soon;) Lol..i got a bit off track here...sorry, this poem is good. The flow was a bit off but i think its because you were paying more attention to the fact that you broke up and needed to get it all out than to the actual poem. But thats not bad, Raw emotion is always cool. you peirced my heart with that poem, that's how much emotion there was...Good Job!!

Wow that was really good. definitely good imagery and wonderful job getting across your emotions... i felt the pain and anger, i'm so sry for everything, but this really was a great poem... definite 5/5 keep up the good work

Mousie

Awesome Poem! You deserve a 5/5 no less! It flowed smoothly, I liked the last staza the best :) great job.

Pray to God you will HEAR (not here)

Other than that, I like it. And I like how it's not tied to any style of writing or rhyming scheme, it just flows on its own from the heart.

*hugs*

BRAVO!! i like this poem alot.. so raw and different.. X (please check out my poems / vote comment or add me to your faves... thanks) X

I've removed your picture only to discover a gaping whole in my heart
((hole))

I really liked this... It was strong with emotion and really said a lot in just a little poem. Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5