Waves

by Aussie   Aug 17, 2006


In the nice calm ocean
you can feel it's heartbeats
in the form of heals
has you lay and relax
on the surface

the sand is unresistible to the touch
it converts by your every curve
and relax your every muscle

without a sign
right behind your back
a monstrous wave
that will swallow you up
without knowing when he'll spit you out

you'll spin and twirl
in a unbeatable speed
has sand feline every hole
while time counts down
for breath in need

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  • 17 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    I like this poem itss a good one of yours, simply because of the imagery. The personification of the water- heartbeat, swallow, spit... was really well done and gave a double meaning to the poem which is easily related to. Great job!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, this was great.. The flow was good, the emotion was clear, and the descriptions beautiful.. I loved how you put lots of imagery into a very sad poem. Nicely done 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Cristian Teo Regalado

    I liked it sometimes i just gotta write poems like this...Keep up the good work...:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Megan

    Hey,
    Thanks for the comment ^_^
    Love this poem.I agree w/ Lonelynow
    5 stars
    keep writeing

  • 17 years ago

    by lonelynow

    I love the way you change the entire mood of the poem half way through. only talent can do that :)

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