Awwww... i don't know if this really happend to u but if so i'm very sorry. i love a boy but he's only a couple months older than me and i love him and he love a nother gurl. anyways i love u'r poem i can feel the love. And how u decribed it very, very good!!! i give u a 5/5 very well keep ^ the good work!!!
Wow.. this is one of the very few poems that actually get my heart pumping. I was.. am.. speechless. That is so very heart wrenching I can barely stand to even think about it.. not the the poem, the situation i nthe poem. Wow. I sincerely hope thats not true. But I love how you wrote it. Like a story from both point of views. That's pure genius. Wow... Kudos.
This had me on the edge of my seat all the way until the end. It's so sad, he loved her but he couldn't be with her. Awwww... I kind of feel sorry for the bride too a little bit (but just a little). I really enjoyed this piece.
I really enjoyed this for different reasons. I liked how you have two separate characters speaking. This is the first piece I've read ever on this site that is able to pull this off which is impressive. I also liked the scenario and how you create characters with depth despite only having a short space to work with. It doesn't sound cliched at all and all the lines fit in perfectly. I was also impressed with how much detail you put in despite only having two lines for each stanza. The only part I did not understand was which girl was pregnant. Excellent stuff anyways, I liked it.