Lonely

by #Philip#   Aug 27, 2006


Siting in the window, waiting for a call.
Yet no one seems to care or even try at all.
Loneliness is creeping, in to my vulnerable heart.
And that is when it starts,
no sleeping in the night or eating in the day.
But some how it never seems to stay.
I always find away to get through it.
With the help of my girlfriend.

Thanks Mel.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Connie

    I liked your poem, especially:

    no sleeping in the night or eating in the day.
    But somehow it never seems to stay.

    Looking forward to reading your next one!

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I liked the way you conveyed your emotions. There were a few grammar errors, and the last line didn't quite fit into the poem. But, it was very good for your first poem. Keep on writing, i look forward to seeing you improve. 4/5 =)
    -Jenna.xo

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    I like the way that you rhymed in it and it flowed very well and everything, but for me the ending seemed a little abrupt and out of place. Maybe you could go on to explain how your girlfriend helped you and turn it into a love poem? Just a suggestion though, but keep on writing!!

  • 17 years ago

    by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ

    Guess what i have a gold d award im so excited!!!! Oh hey and thanks thanks for everything!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Good Job.. Keep writting :)

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

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