This is great! you have mastered the style!! this is very emotional and intense and has a great flow, wonderful poem and a wonderful poet!!

6/5

sarah

I always like poetry in this style/structure, a poem story kinda.
and I think It was Nicely done..
Job well done!

I think this poem eloquently conveyed the emotionss associated with the bereavement of a special person... great work

The new style worked:)..good job..although i felt the flow was a bit off the beautifully worded stanzas made up for it:)
It did sound like a story and a good one at that, so sorry for the loss...Amazing write.
5/5

I like this poemm it was worth the read...=] 5.5

Awesome, good write. I know how it is to lose someone close to you. And you hit the nail dead on. The style of writing as unique and it worked well. Good job.

Oh god, this is truly a perfect poem, but so sad. I am sorry for the lost....
and your that friend is so lucky to have you...
5/5

Great poem, very descriptive, which works well with the style you chose.. great work! 5/5

That's sad. I hope you'll feel better. We're here for you remember. ^-^ Keep it up.

Since this is one of those venting kind of poems, I won't go hard on it, I've done a couple before too.

WOW this is so sad!
but its well written!

Awww it made me start crying because it was sooo emotional and sentimental... im so sorry for your loss and dont worry about n e thing, the flow and word usuage was awesome and it did sound like a story... a truly sad stroy but still a heartfelt one. 5/5

I was cried when i finished reading this poem coz i remember my brother he past away two months ago and til now i still feel the pain and it hurts i also missed him so much.. well this poem is wonderful this is perfect for me. the flow is so good it touch my heart. wow i cant believe this poem make me cry....

WOW, awesome poem. it's so deep in emotion. u can really paint what's there. u got some talent. keep writing:)

It was a sad poem but nt very emotional for one being base don a true story. I'm sorry that it happened though. Because this was more of a venting poem, I won't vote too low on it but if yu wanted to fix it try adding words to describe your emotions so the reader can feel them.

Hey this is such a sad poem. you say its a new style, but you write it like youve been writing for years!
well done
love mel

This poem is sooo.. sad n depressing! I liked it!! 5/5, n sorry that it is true!

Well, i liked that poem because it was sad and it showed emotion and love and the trueness of things like this. so keep writing, you have talent.
xxxxx

Wow soo sad and full of emotion. you did an excellent job writing this. im sorry about what happened tho. if you need anyone to talk to i am here for you. 5/5

WoW ur poem was very very good it had lotz of emotion 5/5

Sorry to hear about this... the poem was nice and I think it's neat that you wrote this poem about your friend's dad.
One question, though, the words inscribed on the gravestone... was that something you came up with for the poem or is it actually what it says on the stone?
I'm only asking cause I think it's very good and I don't know, I just like it - very cleaver.
Anyways, good work! Keep it up!
5/5