Departure

by brianna   Sep 9, 2006


Thoughts spinning through my head,
as I look across my bed.
you've been here for so long,
what am I to do when you're gone.
you said our love would forever be,
I am blind and cannot see.
you will never be the one,
all you looked for is a little fun.
a summer fling as some may say,
I cant go on another day.
I want you to be the one i keep,
my feelings have never ran so deep.
where do I begin to start,
I love you now with all my heart.
don't leave me now...I need you so,
you will never, ever know.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Awww Brianna!!! This is amazing! Fantastic job! I loved it!

  • 17 years ago

    by blueknight

    They all already mentioned the I and flow of the poem, I saw that the rhyme was great and it is enjoyable to read plus you can feel the emotion ghreat job

    Geneross

  • 17 years ago

    by mimzy

    The ending was just perfect and emotional!
    although you should try making the I's capitals.. It sometimes makes poems much more attractive to read
    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by WordsHurt

    Hey! Brianna
    This iz very nice poem! i liked it alot! it flowed very well...but i think you should make this a bit more longer...but i liked the idea of this poem! It was well written!
    Well Done on a fine Job!
    Keep It up
    And
    Keep Smiling

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