Falling

by simply crissyboo   Sep 17, 2006


If you don't want me,
then i don't want you.
you made me look like an idiot,
now i feel so used.
get away from here,
i don't want to see your face,
but before you go,
tell me there's still a place,
like a small, me-sized hole for me,
in your black, little heart,
because i do need your love,
no matter how bad you are.
it's bad for my heart,
to be tangled up in you,
but i can't help myself,
I've fallen for you.
I'm falling farther and farther,
but you just let me fall,
i hope someday you'll see,
i was right after all.
you're the one guy for me,
you'll see it someday,
but for now, I'm still falling,
as you're walking away.

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i don't really like this poem, but tell me what you think anyways. I'd like to know how i can improve it.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I liked the poem, but if you want to improve it, you can add more poetic words to describe everything. Or you can leave it like that, and try it in the next poem. =)

    Thanks for commenting on my poem. I'm glad you liked it.

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 17 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is awesome and thx for the comment on mine and this poem is very good after i was finished i was just staring at the screen my friend had to tell me i was finished lol very good job i loved it

    keenan

  • 17 years ago

    by Corruption

    I thought this was awesome i loved it good job and thx for the comment u left on mine well thats all good job

    keenan