Comments : The Luckiest Guy (part 2)

  • 17 years ago

    by Karma Hope

    At first I took a glance and normally I dont read poems that i think will be long, but i started to read the first few lines and it really pulled me in, kept me interested from those first few lines to the end. So yeah *5/5* effort.. Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Olivia

    That's really good.
    And sad.
    I like it a lot.
    I can relate and it had a lot of depth.
    Kepp it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Wow...i liked this one better then part one...its pretty good 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xXMikansexNoxGuiltXx

    I really liked this one its cool how you like made a sequel to the first part of this poem! ^-^

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I love this poem it goes right with part one. It is easy to understand and has a wonderful flow to it. Keep up the good work and I hope to see even more of your wonderful work in the future.

  • 17 years ago

    by Layla

    Aww, that's so sad, excellent poem, so heartfelt.

  • 17 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    Well i like this again man it is so sweet i like the way you write.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by katie

    I really like ur poem keep up the good work!!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Mr Trio

    Yet another great poem that captures the same feelings I still have only in a different context.

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    This one was better and the rhyming wasn't as stressed. It flowed well, and again, it was sweet. *5/5*

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by elliianna

    Thanks for the comment and i have new poems up that i have just reasently put up plez check them out

    thanks

    your not bad your self

    ~anna~

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Thats really good. 5/5. however i was wondering.
    "You can smile all the time
    As you have much happiness
    I got use to teardrops
    Yet for her, it is meaningless."

    should it be yet TO her, it is meaningless?

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Another great write.
    I love your poems so much.
    YOu have just an amazing heart and mind that really knows how to express itself. Keep up the great work and thank youf or commenting mypoems.
    God Bless 5/5

    ~Tay~

  • 17 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    I liked this, not as much as the first one, but it was still good. One thing I noticed though, was that your rhymes seem a little forced in some places. Other than that it was great, you have a really good idea with this poem. My favorite stanza was:

    "I had the deepest feelings
    Yet never she could see
    Can you do me a favor?
    Advise her not to hate me"

    It was so heart filled, and it was as if you were pleading with her, and the reader could really capture that, great work, I loved it.

    --Steph

  • 17 years ago

    by Cassandra Wojick

    I liked this one just as much as the first one.good job. your really talented

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Aww these keep gettin beta and beta

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    OoOoO...I loved this one...It's very sadd!! I think you did an amzing job on wording...They were really good and seemed to fit nice job!! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was even better than the first one. Ever line had me hooked and just wondering how it would end up. Thanx for continuing this series. Its amazing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Erin

    Its getting better n better ... great job going to read the next one:D

    love erin

  • 16 years ago

    by Delie

    You are really tough aswell.
    and i absolutely adore these poems...:D
    i love how all you want is to see her happy (in first) and now that you just don't want her to hate you.
    just one thing. any girl would be lucky to have you. :)
    i feel like writing a poem for you. iunno :)