Wow... The Rhyme Scheme Was Astounding. I Dont Think There's Any Other Word For This Poem. There Was So Much Emotion In It.... Seriously. You Have A Way With Letting The Reader REALLY Know Whats On Your Mind. And It's Easy To Relate To. Over All- 5/5

Keep Up The Good Work

*~*LoveLustTragedy*~*

Ooo. Well done on this one. There was loads of emotion, and it was very sad. The flow was just right, the emotion perfect for this kind of poem, and the rhymes weren't half bad either. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Whew. That was a very strong and emotional poem. You had a great flow and amazing imagery. Great job with this one, I liked it alot! :) Keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie

OMG!!! this was really good! it had a great flow and it stayed in the rhyme scheme you picked. it had great vocabulary and also had a lot of similes, metaphores, etc. i really think this was great! 5/5 for me! thankz for r/r/c mine!

Wow, this has left me in awe, powerfully written, lots of emotion, love the flow and rhythm... keep it up

Very nice poem~! The flow was wonderful and the emotion was clear, awesome write,
-Ann

Dang Woman!

I LOVE IT! ooooh *goosebumps* I'm very glad your in my favorites. Your name fits you. >:) love love love it! How can you rhyme so perfectly. You totally gave me an idea for a poem! Your vocabulary is awesome! I can't choose which lines I love the best?!?

LOVE IT!

I wish I could give you a waaaaaaaay bigger score than a 5 but I guess I must settle with it...

5/5

Absolutely amazing!! There are so many times I feel as if no-one REALLY gets the torment or that I cant will it away, Thank You for bringing some much needed understanding.

Did you get my email? I sent you an email, asking you if I can sumbit a poem, I got the idea from this one, and there are some similarities...

Chaotic Mind

Silent screams and unshed tears,
Chaotic thoughts and untold fears.
Secrets hidden throughout the years.
Deadly scars and broken mirrors.

Perfectly painted death-filled dreams.
Hidden behind hollow screams.
Smells of all her twisted lies.
Horrific paintings start to arise.

Blood filling every pore.
Blinding pain like never before.
A tortured heart cries in pain.
A penetrating scream of the insane.

Cruel actions decorate her skin.
Fighting a battle, no one can win.
Whispering wishes, no one can hear.
Chaotic smiles start to appear.

Bloody cuts, a broken soul.
A Chaotic Mind has no control.
Hysterical screams pierce the silence.
Reality gone, thoughts of violence.

Chaotic mind, no memory.
Only one thought of a remedy.
Lovely gun, your so kind.
Tragic end of a Chaotic Mind.

Can I Post It?

Thanks Steph,

Yeah I didn't give her permission I put it as copywrite though, they'll delete it, I hope. I also sent her a comment something like : Hey this looks familar... Oh yeah, Its mine.

Thanks again steph ur a babe.

~Brittney

Wow. This is pretty much amazing. I love this poem...

This has got to be one of my favourites (rhyming wise) that I've read on this site. Everything just flowed perfectly. I loved it! Excellent work.

This is a well penned poem. Great job!

Amazing hon! great job. i'm speechless. keep it up and take care love!

x3Lauren

I loved it!!! WOW!!! Thats such an amazing poem!!!! My fav bit was
"Hollow screams echo here
Smell of twisted dying fear
Smile of chaos; pooling blood
Lies of misery; sound of muds "
Brillent!!!! 5/5 well done, thank you for the lovely comment you left on my poem!

Wow. I love this poem.. You're very talented!

I love the poem, really a great job, it was really good. 5/5

Ohmygosh. This was an amazing poem. I hardly know what to say. It touched on so many points and meant so much it was almost overwelming. I love it. 5/5 for sure!

Omg very nice! this poem is a very poetic and great, smart choice of words and everything 5/5!,
Oh and you got the same taste of music as me, LP and TDG are my fav bands =P,
Anyway, love the poem, I'm gonna read your others,

Dang, I love this one too, Your a great poet, Love it!, another profound piece!