Still in the Silence

I liked this.

I thought the flow was a little off in some places, but apart from that it was a wonderful write.

Great again!

a few minor errors but nothing serious.
All I hear 'tis because of treason
..huh?

Never did I mean to hurt you
And I know now it's too late
What's left for me to do
But to sit here and wait
i think this does need some work.
i do a thing where i read a stanza then i rewrite it the way i would rewrite it if it was my own.
so heres my rewrite

Never did I mean for you to get hurt
But I know now that it's too late
Please tell me what's left for me to do
Except to just sit here and wait for you

do with this what you will but i do this to show poeple options. i mean please do not copy this. but use if for maybe some guidance on what you could do. =]

x3 Lauren

Love it. I've been in your situation before, so I could relate. The rhyming seemed a little off now and again, but overall it was very, very well written. :)

Beautiful message.. but I'd have to agree with those who commented on the flow of the poem.. Such a great write.. I'm sure you still have things you may want to add to make this poem a masterpiece.. Made all the more special because I know why this poem was written.. Keep writing and stay the same!!

Beautifully penned, wonderful flow, and great imagery! I love this poem and i've added you to my FAVORITES!!! Great job! =D

xxEvilAngelxx