Awesome, Had some of the best flow in a poem, Truely got a tallent here, Rhymeing I will give a 4.5 but flow I give a 5.5,

Over all on the poem is a 5/5 for me, You did a great job, I really liked the begginging of the poem in paticular

Keep it up,

Eric

"Making my dreams come true
You're everything a woman wants
And that's why I love you dear
Of course I'll marry you"

So envious. Who is this guy?

This poem was absolutely beautiful I tell you. It was so cute.

I enjoyed the repetition of "the passion within". keeping the poem to the title's meaning.

I can honestly say with that I am. Beautiful. Well written.

HOWEVER, I can't just praise you because the rest of the people here love your poems.
To the criticism.

I believe you need to write more, I mean. It's beautiful, yes. But write more than just less than 5 or 4 syllables each sentence.

All the words there are simple words that I can pick of from the top of my head. It seems like many that I have read before. Nothing 'new'.

I have seen this poem repeated many times by other poets.

Because the fact that I like the poems ending with left me in total 'awe'. It gave me a big push to a five. But theres no... how do I say it. No powerful words of vocabulary. I am only one critique, and I personally, LOVE powerful vocabulary.

This... seemed so plain. Beautiful yes, still plain.

It's a good poem. Not excellent.

[Vote 4]

_Sam

Awwwww how sweet.long time no hear dude!!1 hope all is weel with you.xo

I really like how the title keeps coming back to bite you in the butt. I love the repetition of that. I like the structure of this poem, the short sharp stanza's keep you reading. It never gets boring, considering you are writing about a topic written to death.

"Nothing but the beauty of thee
Thee who holds the key to me"

Fantastic lines, sounds almost biblical.

The more i read the more i like your work.
Great work Joe.

~Pete.

I like the flow of this piece a lot, and you did very good job with rhymes.
This poem holds so many emotions, it is very touching, truly greatly written. I love when I can feel what the writer wanted to express, and that's the case with this poem.
Greatly done!

Wow this brought back the memoy of when i proposed to my wife sort of, love the way the stanzas consitently flow with their own style and grace, wicked poem keep em comin!

5/5

This honestly was such a beautiful piece. The flow was so smoothe almost chant like. The emotions were capturing I could tell they really come from your heart because of the way you expressed yourself so deeply into the poem. You wrote this in great depth and I could feel words latching onto my heart. Overall such an enchanting read which i'm glad I have had the pleasure to read. Well done. Keep up the great work. ~Mel

I love this peom I can never really get Love poems quite right so I prefer to rite lost love ones as there right in my elament gr8 job 5/5

Passion within
Your smile I see
Nothing but the beauty of thee
Thee who holds the key to me

so beautiful

i liked it the most

Well I'm not a very big fan of your flow.. But the emotion, rhyming, theme.. made up for it. The easy was to fix the flow is make sure each line beats together.. for example

The breath from his soft velvet lips
escaped into the air
And from that hot breath, a hidden meaning
Mysteries awaiting there.

Its kinda choppy.. if you count the slylables(sp) you can get it right:

The breath from his soft velvet lips
Escaped into that cold night air
In that hot breath, a hidden meaning
So many mysteries awaiting there.

yup yup. Hoped it helped

5/5

*sighs* passion and love,,,,,, ah what a wonderful thing :) he he whos it about :)

Great poem the flow was awesome and you cut off the "passion within" beginning of the stanza at exactly the right time anymore and it would have been annoying so to speak, any less and i would be disappointed. all in all 5/5