I don't have any suggestions for this, as i think it's perfect. I was really suprised at the end reading that it was from a daughter to her father. I could really feel that it was filled with true emotions. I like the style in which you wrote it, i think it worked very well with what you were putting across. Excellently written. 5/5 From me.

Tammie

Really good!!!! great job!!!! really moving!!!!!!!!!!Shauna XxXXx

I thought it was a good ending, it didnt rhyme, I usually prefer it does, but it worked well. It was original in a way, I wouldnt say it was great, but better than good. Well done, keep it up.
PS a lot of the time titles draw me to the poem, this title describes the poem, but wouldnt usually draw me in.

Awww..this was really touching. this poem makes you think that your talking about someone you love and so i was just like " yeah ok, this has been written a million times" but at the end..wow...it made me wanna like tear a little...it was pretty unexpected and change my whole view on it/...so 5/5..very nicely done:)

Wonderful job. I'll be honest, at first, the poem sounded simple. But the last stanza give the whole poem a boost.

Aww, sometimes I wonder the same with my dad. Very sad. I love these stanzas the best:

I stand in front of you
Face to face
Do you see me?

I tell you that I love you
Feelings from within
Do you love me?

I tell you how much you hurt me
Kill you with the words
Do you hate me?

These words from a daughter
Go straight to her father
Does he even care?

Awesome Job!
5/5

RAD.

Omg this is really good, kinda sad in a way, and shocking

Great poem :) keep it up

OMG...i love this poem...i can relate...but switch the parents around...Oh...5/5 good job keep it up

Very nice
I'm very sorry
I think you did an excellent job with all of the last lines
very nice
5/5
kaila

Another well written piece, Marie :). This time, your repetition works much more effectively, as your sentances are sharper and straightfowardly put. However, a small suggestion for improving. In each stanza, just at the end of the second line, place a full stop- this well make the sentances more abrupt. Also, don't hesitate to weave more adjectives or emotive language into your words. This will help bring out the meaning to your piece and give definition to your work.
An example of this:

"I speak directly to you,
Words leaking from my mouth.
Do you hear me?"

Personally, I think that possesses more meaning. But that's just my opinion; the end change is up to you :D.

Overall, a solid piece :).

I found this piece to be quite great to tell you the truth. I feel as though the repetition worked really well throughout this it was effective. I think if you added more describing words into this poem it would make the emotions more stronger, Not though they werent I just think with a bit more It would make this poem really powerful. Other then that this was quite a meaningful read. Well done on creating this~mel

This is a beautiful free verse poem. It had its own style in it and the flow is also cool. I like your wordings.I gave it a 5/5

With love
Fsams

I liked the questioning sentences and unanswered words and they are so true
As everyone asks this sometimes
I liked he wording and flow of this
Good job,
Laura