Secret .

by BrokenREALiTy   Nov 17, 2006


You look at me with a smile,
Can't help but smile back.
But then she arrives,
And my whole world goes black.

Waving you good-bye,
You look at me confused.
Walking away near tears,
My heart unknowingly abused.

There's nothing I can do,
When your heart is in her hands.
No one I can go to anymore,
It was only you that understands.

But what to do when you're the one,
That's causing all my pain?
'Cause I know that if you lose her,
You'd go insane.

Every time I glance at you,
Whenever you're not with me.
You're showing her off to the world,
For everyone to see.

Running out into the rain,
I feel like I'm dying.
When the sky is raining tears,
No one can see me crying.

But even when it's pouring,
You can always seem to tell.
Why'd we gotta be so close?
You know me way too well.

Asking me what's wrong,
I don't know what to say.
Do I tell you the truth?
No, I look away.

Ignoring you with all my might,
I can't tell you how I feel.
It'll just make things awkward,
'Cause these feelings are too real.

So I'll just keep this little secret,
And let my smile stay askew.
Maybe later I'll be able to talk about,
How I've fallen in love with you.
[c] 2O06 Mindy Huang

Whoa. I know the flow is rocky and it doesn't all make sense. I need to edit it, but any feedback to help with that?

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  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet Disposition

    WOW! I absolutely love it!

  • 15 years ago

    by jyzka

    Nice poem!!
    this was exactly how i felt right now..
    it's as if I am reminiscing all the pain I've gone through when I read your poem..
    this really made me cry..
    great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by kayla T

    This is really good ! keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Mally P

    I like your poem...I think it is sad how many of us girls find ourselves in that situation...I just wrote a poem about it too. Anyway, feedback: I like it...but if you want something....i'd look at this part:
    'Cause I know that if you lose her,
    You'd go insane.

    Every time I glance at you,
    Whenever you're not with me.
    You're showing her off to the world,
    For everyone to see.

    It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem, which flowed together beautifully!

  • 17 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    Awwww i like this one it is nice i can relate to it just like everyone else and no you dont need to edit anything