Mmm, i liked it, because it was different. i started getting into it and then the pattern slipped but i relaised that it was good because it wasn't to specific, and i like to use my imagination a little when reading poems
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That was amazing!
sadly,i can sorta relate..but it was still an amazing poem =]
thanks for joining my comment fiesta!
--lexie♥

p.s.yes,please bring the maracas! =]

That was amazing!
sadly,i can sorta relate..but it was still an amazing poem =]
thanks for joining my comment fiesta!
--lexie♥

p.s.yes,please bring the maracas! =]

It does seem like real love then once they get what they want their true side comes unveiled... im sorry that it happened as it did, some guys never learn but fate will turn its hand..

Interesting... After that one kiss did it get a little out of hand?...and you lied to your parents... I don't know ... Tell me >:]

Great Poem! You kept me hooked through the whole thing, I'm glad you said, make it harsh, I feel like I can comment without getting the person mad at me.

Problems:
A met a boy in the spring of `o6, .. A met? maybe I met is what you meant.

The emotions that we shared together,
were simply more vivid than the sun
It just didn't sound right.. maybe the part 'vivid than the sun' I don't know, read it aloud maybe that will help

And your last stanza didn't rhyme
Maybe try:
So I guess you probably want to know;
About that one night and why?
Let`s just say it started out with a kiss.
And ended with a blatant lie.

I don't know!!! You have me curious PLEASE tell me what happened.

-lets just say my life won't be complete till you do- ;)

Amazing Poem! Great Rhyming, Awesome Vocab.

5/5

Wow.
I loved how you ended it. You sort of left the reader hanging, amazing! =] Great flow and vocabulary. Though I have to say that I really have no clue what so ever what happened that made it such a bad night. Please do tell! =] 5/5 Great job!

Stephanie

Nice poem, and you truly made me think.
I can think of three things.

1, you got pregnent that nite.
2, he raped you that night
or
3, you fall in love that night.

please let me know if any of them are correct.
BTW a 5/5 from me.

I loved this, I thought it was a beautiful read, even though it was so sad.
I think that it started out really well but things fell apart?

Wow. that was pretty cool.
At first I thought he died.

hm.

And why December's night. I thought this took place in the summer and septemberish. And the fateful night was in the summer.....

good poem though, i enjoy reading your work

Boiling days and sticky nights,
Simply drifted by my mind,

Great imagery. The flow was well done and the message was solid.

We can all pretty much guess what happened. It started with a kiss...

Good job
Jeannie