When A Songbird Sings (Tetractys)

by Bryan   Dec 13, 2006


Your
heart sings
to me, like
a songbird on
a willow tree, It casteth its shadow
on my heart, and like a puzzle it was
torn apart, when
you look in
my eyes,
the
look
you give
it tells me
goodbye, and my
mind tells me your wrong, but my heart still hears
that beautiful song, that makes my heart sting,
the love that it
brings, when a
songbird
sings.

Tectractys is a style that is composed of 5 lines with a syllable count of 1,2,3,4,10.

double Tectractys is 1,2,3,4,10,10,4,3,2,1.

a triple 1,2,3,4,10,10,4,3,2,1,1,2,3,4,10

and so on...

Bryan Hunt © 2006

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  • 16 years ago

    by Natasha

    I like coming across a style that I have not often read on this site but also the poem itself is very unique!
    This one defenatly deserves a 5/5. you really get the idea you are there, and can picture the songbird singing!
    I really really liked it!
    keep on writing, you're very talented!

    ~* Natasha *~

  • 16 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #10:
    I don't know why it doesn't have more comments, I love it! It's not a style usually seen on the site and I like that. Great job, and congrats again on coming in first! :)
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 17 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Whoa, I really like this! Another fantastic one Bry, really. You are a good writer with all the styled ones.
    Just one thing, minor,
    line 15:
    mind tells me your
    should be
    mind tells me you're

    I mean, it's really no big deal. Great job, once again. easy 5/5! Don't ever stop hun!

    Ciao

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Excellent job on this form. It's a lot longer than the one I did!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Beautiful! Your poems are so great! This one made me smile as I read it just picturing a song bird. Great job!

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