My Soul Cries Blackened Tears

by Bryan   Dec 17, 2006


How long can my heart endure such pain,
Guilt and shame that will forever remain,
Slowly I'm dying from love and I wont be the same,
Same love remains dying from the guilt and the shame.

Trying to survive, but I don't know how long,
I can live without you, I'm trying to be strong,
Sometimes I'm wrong, but one thing is true,
Surviving is wrong, when its without you.

With this final note, my soul dies with fear,
My heart cries from its loss with blackened tears.
You don't know it, but your love is killing me,
But my soul cries for you for an eternity.

I must endure it, even if it means ill die,
My heart and soul will have to live through the goodbyes
And my guilt and shame will soon die too,
So now I can make it, even if it means without you,
My blackened tears will soon turn back clear,
With this final note, there wont be no more tears.

this used to be a paradelle, but it wasn't quite right.

Bryan Hunt © 2006

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  • 16 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    "How long can my heart endure such pain,
    Guilt and shame that will forever remain"

    ^^^
    Maybe add a question mark somewhere in that as it is a question. That might be just me but i think it will work better like that.

    "Trying to survive, but I don't know how long,
    I can live without you, I'm trying to be strong,
    Sometimes I'm wrong, but one thing is true,
    Surviving is wrong, when its without you."

    ^^^
    Yes I totally agree with that section. I can survive without the one I love, but that doesnt mean I ever want to contemplate being without them. well written.

    "With this final note, my soul dies with fear,
    My heart cries from its loss with blackened tears."

    ^^^
    This line was awesome. Beautiful imagery, which I LOVE in a poem.

    Wicked ending.
    Love your poems.

    Though you prolly know that already.
    Keep it up

    well done
    ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by blind soul

    Hey wow that was so great i loved the feeling inside it you are the best poet on here cause all your poems have alot of feeling and emotion to them all...great work!

  • 17 years ago

    by megan

    I like this poem its really good!!

    ~megan~

  • 17 years ago

    by ashley

    That was a very good poem

  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    I really loved the title of this. It really caught me. It flowed really well & was very beautiful. The wording & imagery.. EXCELLENT!

    Amazing job. Keep it up.

    Bri.x

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