Dad

This is sad also. Your revised poem is the better of the two. The sadness and emotion can be felt in both poems. Good Job!

Thats purty powerful i lik it alot i'm sry if that is true, bad relationship w/ my dad sumtimes i wish he was waiting

Deep poem . when you write something
and some one else like me someone
you don't know feels your pain then
you know its good. share it and then
live with the pain. what ever you do
don't hang on to pain like it something special. never forget
just don't live it every day. trust me
i really know what im talking about.

That is really sad. honestly i hope you've moved on from that and enjoy your life as it is now. thanx for the comments on my poems. urs are rely good. I'm glad you survived ur fathers death unlike my friends. I guess thats the price you pay for giving your heart to someone. Another one of my friends lost her mother a few years back, very derpessing, its always hard to lose a parent. mine r both living but it wouldnt surpise me if my dad died soon. and honestly i hope he does... it'll b the end of everyones misery. well im off... thx again
much luv .xx

Hey you read my poem and said you could relate so i read yours and it was beautiful thank you for your comment and may your dad rest in peace along with mine